With shredded bits of stars clinging to your fork, I watched you try to swallow the sky. Your mother always said you were hungry for things you could not have. ...

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This, I love!  The use of space and planets, I have never read it like this before.  It's so original and interesting.  My favorite line is "Light cannot be chewed or digested."  So much power in that one line!  Fantastic work!