A beautiful piece. My favorite part of this is the way you describe a Monarch's wing: the fire-ink design on that Monarch’s wings
That is an astounding image to me. I can't get over how much I love that. There are 2 levels of liking something: One in which you admire said thing, and one in which you hate yourself for not thinking of it first. This happens to be the latter.
Now I will quit acting like a school girl and give you some concrete review.
I was really hoping you would take the Monarch concept a little farther and relate it to a king, or some type of government authority. It would have brought a whole new level to the poem. I really wish, just for me, you would go back and dive a little deeper into this and add that in. If you did I would have sex with this poem. I would also like to see you bring some type of form to the poem, maybe something to reflect the shape of a butterfly or something. I just think it would make the whole piece look as good as it is written. I love your use of the ocean to create a feeling of distance, and bring a little melancholy to the poem. Not only the sea, but men who sail the sea. I really enjoyed this. Thank you for the wonderful read, and keep writing! -Isaac