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Counting Down

I had a blacksmith's forge, once.

I only actually "forged" twice.

I only lit it three times,

and four times my father threatened to tear down the ugly little thing.

it's been there five years now, waiting and rusting patiently.

I don't know if it will last for a sixth, but I'll make sure I'm not around when it collapses.

I want to keep counting up life, instead of counting down to death.

Overall

I love this piece. I love the imagery of the blacksmith's forge, but I also liked that the reader can look at it as less concrete and more symbolic.  Counting up to life is certainly better than counting down to death! Well done!